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PostPosted: Sat Oct 04, 2014 5:09 pm 
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In case you don't already know about the form of Haiku poems, here are the rules:
Only three lines, and five syllables in the first and the third line, and seven syllables in the second line. There in no need for rhyming, but if you can make it rhyme it's an extra bonus.
Here are some of mine:

A bahro cried out
in a Teledahn prison
just when Shroomie shout


The trees in Kadish
reaches slowly for the sky
while leaves are falling


Up on the railing
overlooking Kerath's arch
I'm sometimes standing


In the orange glow
of numberous dropped pellets
the lake will light up


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PostPosted: Sat Oct 04, 2014 5:16 pm 
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This should be off topic

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 Post subject: Re: Haiku
PostPosted: Sat Oct 04, 2014 5:52 pm 
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Alien wrote:
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This should be off topic

It's five syllables
That haiku is invalid
Your last line has six

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PostPosted: Sat Oct 04, 2014 5:58 pm 
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The cavern is whole
Except for good old OHBot
Swinging 'round the pole

Always got our backs
The Grey hats ever present
With some awesome hax

Countdown has begun
Press your cloths in the right way
Cave opens, now run!

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 Post subject: Re: Haiku
PostPosted: Sat Oct 04, 2014 6:13 pm 
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OHB wrote:
The cavern is whole
Except for good old OHBot
Swinging 'round the pole

Your Haiku is invalid ... OHBot is three syllables Oh Haich Bot

sorry, but you did it to me, so ner !!! :P

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 Post subject: Re: Haiku
PostPosted: Sat Oct 04, 2014 7:09 pm 
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Kneb wrote:
In case you don't already know about the form of Haiku poems, here are the rules:


If I may wax philosophical..... Haikus are also supposed to be a 'moment'. They are supposed to capture your reaction and feelings, etc, to looking at something, hearing something, etc... There's a bit of Zen and the concept of living entirely in the present moment that goes along with a Haiku.


For that reason, I tend to write haikus in present-tense:



I hear a loud shriek
Standing near the linking book
should I still link out?

I pull the lever
perhaps one time too often?
The staircase is gone.

The rain is stopping.
I come out of the tunnel.
What pretty torch-bugs!

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Alien wrote:
Your Haiku is invalid ... OHBot is three syllables Oh Haich Bot

OH-Bot. Two syllables :)

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PostPosted: Sun Oct 05, 2014 11:06 am 
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If we're being technical, I'd wager every haiku here isn't really correct, as it's not syllables that you count, it's morae. They're like syllables, except you can have multiple morae per syllable. Here're some roughly conforming to the Japanese rules:

Once again
Stream in the Cleft
Begins to flow.

D'ni, the city
Of Ages died.
But now, breathes.

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PostPosted: Sun Oct 05, 2014 11:55 am 
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And the first and third line should be a contrasting ‘image’ of sort, divided by an ‘action’.

the towering arch
light brushes the piers
algae glowing

hands that touch cloths
a rusty door opens
an empty garden

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PostPosted: Sun Oct 05, 2014 12:36 pm 
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Using the morae, the vowels í ay ee oy oo would count as two.

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 Post subject: Re: Haiku
PostPosted: Sun Oct 05, 2014 2:32 pm 
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PostPosted: Sun Oct 05, 2014 4:28 pm 
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korovev wrote:
Using the morae, the vowels í ay ee oy oo would count as two.

Also syllable codas. With my English examples, I considered long vowels as short vowels purely to fit a fair number of words in.

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